Feedback on 1st draft

In this blog post we are writing up the feedback on our first draft of "Because of them".

Firstly we learned about what people thought what was good about are film opening. Here are what some people thought.

• They was a good range of shots.
• A lot of transitions where good.
• Good shots from the bottom of the stairs.
• A lot of people thought the locations where good.
• Another good aspect was the different editing effects.
• They was also good costumes.

Then we learnt about what people found confusing.

• Some people said the scenes jumped .
• One person didn't understand the storyline.
• Someone said it was boring.
• A lot commented on how loud the sound was.
• One person said there was too much enigma.
• Some people mentioned that the titles where in the wrong place.

Then we got told how we could improve our film opening.

• The titles needed to be a different colour.
• The sound needs to be louder
• Maybe some speech to make the storyline clearer.
• The titles need to be re-ordered.
• Maybe a suffergate voiceover to make the genre clearer.
• lighting and colouring could have been adjusted.